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Is death the end? Would you go back and change your fate is you had the chance? Would you forgive someone who has hurt you all your life, embarrassed you so much that you were scared to leave the house and has excluded you from any social activities until you lose all your friends? Will Emma Law?

CHARACTER BIOGRAPHIES:

Emma: Past away in February in the year of 2012 and has unfinished business with the ‘The bitches’ who picked and bullied on her from a very young age. She has a secret to tell but decides to give the chance of forgiveness.
She is a 16 year old girl that attended Coppers Prep; she was never a ‘popular’ girl yet had many true friends. She used to be part of the ‘The bitches’ but grew apart one summer and was never accepted back and lived to regret this.
She used to look forward from graduating from Coppers Prep and going to college, studying away from the ‘The bitches’ She had so much planned for the rest of her life. She loved helping people (which is probably why she never fitted in with the ‘The bitches’) she wanted to work in orphanages around the world, she wanted to create charities to help, she wanted to raise money to save them, but they took this all away from her.

Mia: She controlled everyone in Coppers Prep. She was in charge. She could either give you a reputation or ruin it for everyday of your education. She loved to upset people. She was once bullied in primary school and hated being at the bottom of the ranks so when she started at Coppers Prep she had to work her way up but to do this she had to pick on people. Violet and April: I’ve put these girls together as they’re identical twins but not only in looks, they do everything the same and aren’t really very unique – they follow Mia around and do everything that she wants or asks for. They don’t really have a mind of their own.

STATMENT OF INTENT:

I am the right person to produce and write this radio drama as I have a personal connection to this story although I have used artistic right and changed the outcome. I feel I can make this appropriate for the target audience as I am the age that I’d like it appeal to, therefore I know what is liked and disliked.

STORYLINE:

Basically, Emma passed away earlier this year and is back to forgive so she can move on from this horrid event, she will talk to you as an unseen character. To forgive the person who has done this she has to find out who actually did it. If she manages to forgive she gets the chance to change events – although she can’t bring herself back to life, she can change how it happened – which would mean that she can choose to make the guilty innocent. After following Mia around Emma see’s that Mia is under a lot of stress and upset at home and begins to understand a little why she picks on other people. The fact that she is no longer doesn’t come clear until the end and will come to a surprise to the listeners. This will make the rest of the story become a lot clearer.

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3 Opening Paragraphs

PAST

I could see the sun shining in my eyes but it was dark all around, I felt like I was on stage in the spot light. It was all really confusing. I felt dizzy and my throat hurt, I thought I was coming down with something – it was flu season so I thought that maybe I was just getting the common cold but that didn’t explain the darkness all around. I felt like I was getting pushed towards the light. NO NO NO NOOOOOOOOOO (fades)

I could see the pain in people’s eyes as they crowded around me. I could feel my stomach swirl with guilt – I discovered I could feel pain back then. I could remember my mum, my dad and my younger brother in tears. Didn’t they know this is the best way? But why was she there? Did she feel guilt as well? Mia Stook the definition of evil, she had no pain in her eyes, her perfect rosy lips are just frozen in straight line, her face showed no emotion at all. Did that mean she’s not happy or not sad? She was always really hard to read. Unlike me, people used to be able to read me like an open book. I couldn’t stay here any longer, I needed to find somewhere else.

The school had never been so depressing. Photos of me covered the walls in the dark deserted hall ways. No-one was ever  in school at this time and back then I didn’t understand why, but that night I discovered, if I had a choice I wouldn’t have been either but I didn’t, I was stuck there until I forgave, I understand that now. She did this to me – I didn’t want to be the bigger person that time. She made my last moments so unbearable that I had no choice but to do this, I regret it now seeing the pain in people’s eyes but they’ll recover, I didn’t think I would though, and I’m happier now.

PRESENT

I can see the sun shining in my eyes but it’s dark all around, I feel like I’m on stage in the spot light. This is all really confusing. I feel dizzy and my throat hurts, I must be coming down with something – its flu season maybe I’m just getting the common cold but that doesn’t explain the darkness all around. I feel like I’m getting pushed towards the light. NO NO NO NOOOOOOOOOO (fades)

I could see the pain in people’s eyes when they crowded around me. I could feel my stomach swirl with guilt – do I still feel then? My mum, my dad, my younger brother – in tears? Don’t they know this is the best way? Why’s she here? Does she feel guilt as well? Mia Stook the definition of evil, she has no pain in her eyes, her perfect rosy lips are just frozen in straight line, her face shows no emotion at all. Does that mean she’s not happy or not sad? She was always really hard to read. Unlike me, people used to be able to read me like an open book. I can’t stay here, I need to find somewhere else.

The school has never been so depressing. Photos of me cover the walls in the dark deserted hall ways. No-one’s  in school at this time and now I can understand why, if I had a choice I wouldn’t be either but I don’t, I’m stuck here until I forgive, I understand that now. She did this to me – I don’t want to be the bigger person this time. She made my last moments so unbearable that I had no choice but to do this, I regret it now seeing the pain in people’s eyes but they’ll recover, I didn’t think I would though, and I’ll be happier now.

FUTURE

I will see the sun shining in my eyes but it will be dark all around, I will feel like I’m on stage in the spot light. This will be really confusing. I will feel dizzy and my throat will hurt, I must be coming down with something – it will be flu season maybe I will just getting the common cold but that won’t explain the darkness all around. I will feel like I’m getting pushed towards the light. I’ll shout NO NO NO NOOOOOOOOOO (fades)

I will see the pain in people’s eyes when they crowd around me. I will feel my stomach swirl with guilt – will I still feel then? My mum, my dad, my younger brother – in tears? Won’t they know this is the best way? Why will she be there? Will she feel guilt as well? Mia Stook the definition of evil, she’ll have no pain in her eyes, her perfect rosy lips will be frozen in straight line, her face will show no emotion at all. Does that mean she’ll not happy or not sad? She’ll be really hard to read. Unlike me, people used to be able to read me like an open book. I can’t stay here, I need to find somewhere else.

The school will never be so depressing. Photos of me will cover the walls in the dark deserted hall ways. No-one will be in school at this time and I’ll can understand why, if I had a choice I won’t be either but I won’t, I’ll be stuck there until I forgive, I’ll understand that then. She will do this to me – I won’t want to be the bigger person that time. She will make my last moments so unbearable that I’ll have no choice but to do this, I’ll regret it, seeing the pain in people’s eyes but they’ll recover, I thought I wouldn’t have, but I’ll be happier.

Script

INT. SCHOOL HALLWAY. NIGHT

SCHOOL VERY QUIET BUT ECHOEY. THE ONLY NOISES TO BE HEARD ARE EMMA’S FOOT STEPS AND BREATHING UNTIL THE BITCHES ARRIVE.

EMMA

The school has never been so depressing. Left over photos of me cover the walls in the dark deserted hall ways. No-one’s  in school at this time and now I can understand why, if I had a choice I wouldn’t be either but I don’t, I’m stuck here until I forgive, I understand that now. She did this to me – I don’t want to be the bigger person this time. She made my last moments so unbearable that I had no choice but to do this, I regret it now seeing the pain in people’s eyes but they’ll recover, I didn’t think I would though, and I’ll be happier now.

MIA

She was always weird; she’d do anything to get attention. Although I’ll give her credit, I didn’t think she’d go this far.

EMMA

I needed help, I needed a friend, I needed someone to be there by my side through thick and thin. What happened to you? You were that person once before.

VIOLET

Mia, she needed help not attention.

MIA

Well she should have asked for it if she wanted it then shouldn’t she.

EMMA

I did ask. No-one cared. I’m Emma, no-one cares for Emma.

APRIL

Would you have helped her then? You’ve hated her ever since she started here for no reason.

MIA

It wasn’t for no reason but I don’t bring everyone down with my feelings like you do April. Anyway we need to get out of here before someone see’s us.

EMMA

It was for no reason? Didn’t they see me? I’ve always been invisible but this feels strange, I walked straight past the janitor when the schools meant to be locked. The schools meant to be locked…What were THEY doing here? What was the time? Why didn’t they want anyone to see them? So many questions…I need some answers.

EMMA RUNS OFF FOLLOWING THE BITCHES. SOUND EFFECTS – RUNNING FOOTSTEP, DOOR OPENING AND SHUTTING.

INT. CLASSROOM. NIGHT

EMMA HAS FOLLOWED MIA, VIOLET AND APRIL INTO A CLASSROOM AND OVER HEARS THERE CONVOSATION.

MIA

…on me

VIOLET

I know… it was totally not your fault I can’t believe they said that, like oh my gosh.

APRIL

I know! It was totally not your fault Mia they don’t know what they’re talking about. Don’t worry we’ll set the record right.

MIA

No don’t worry what does it matter what they think anyway. None of them matter, they were behind me until Emma decides to do this.

EMMA

Why are you talking about me? What’s it got anything to do with you? I can do whatever I like, you don’t control my every move.

(in head)

It felt so good to get that off my chest! I’ve wanted to stand up to Mia all my life.

VIOLET

(Quiet and shy) Me don’t kill me or anything but you did pick on her quite a bit and I think I’d be pretty hurt if you said and did the things you did to her? (Confident and loud) Like I know she deserved it and everything (Quiet and shy) but still.

EMMA

I can’t believe your standing up to her Violet.
Wait everything’s coming back to me…

INT. HEAVEN. EARLY MORNING

JOURNEY TO HEAVEN – DARK AND CREEPY BUT A BRIGHT LIGHT SHINING ON EMMA WHILE SHE’S WALKING TOWARDS THE BEAM. VERY SILENT – NO SOUNDS OTHER THAN HER BREATHING, THOUGHTS, AND THE ODD FOOTSTEPS.

EMMA

I can see the sun shining in my eyes but it’s dark all around, I feel like I’m on stage in the spot light. This is all really confusing. I feel dizzy and my throat hurts, I must be coming down with something – its flu season maybe I’m just getting the common cold but that doesn’t explain the darkness all around. I feel like I’m getting pushed towards the light. NO NO NO NOOOOOOOOOO (fades)

INT. CLASSROOM. NIGHT

APRIL

Are you going to the funeral Mia?

MIA

NO, I’ve got nothing to do with it violet and of course I’m not April, Hell would have to freeze over before I go to HER funeral.

EXT. GRAVEYARD. DAY

EMMA’S FUNERAL – WEEPING AND SNIFFING – vicar – A FEW CRYING WITH THE ODD BIRD IN THE BACKGROUND.

EMMA

I could see the pain in people’s eyes when they crowded around me. I could feel my stomach swirl with guilt – do I still feel then? My mum, my dad, my younger brother – in tears? Don’t they know this is the best way? Why’s she here? Does she feel guilt as well? Mia Stook the definition of evil, she has no pain in her eyes, her perfect rosy lips are just frozen in straight line, her face shows no emotion at all. Does that mean she’s not happy or not sad? Wait? Is that a tear? Does she feel guilt? She was always really hard to read. Unlike me, people used to be able to read me like an open book. I can’t stay here, I need to find somewhere else.

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The Archers - http://www.bbc.co.uk/programmes/b01mk0dv

Title: The Archers

Director: Micheal Powell

Producers: Kim Greengrass, Rosemary Watts




Storyline: Vicky drops fractious Abbie off at school. Brenda's sympathetic. They meet up at lunchtime, when Vicky confesses Mike can see only the negative side regarding the baby. But Vicky has a renewed excitement. She shows Brenda lots of positive postings and images on the net. The baby moves again and Vicky talks about finding out whether it's a boy or a girl. They agree it would be good if they could get Mike to share the enthusiasm.

Tom's happy that Kirsty and Frank have agreed to make up some of his ready meal samples at Jaxx. He's found storage for them too. Brenda asserts it's great to have some good news for a change.

Matt's frustrated when he can't get hold of Darrell. Lilian's short with him and he's left wondering what he's done. He catches up with her later at The Bull, in melancholy mood with Adam.

Darrell and Elona are pleased when Darrell gets some specialist carpentry work on a church refurbishment, although the job won't start for a few weeks. Darrell wonders if they can manage if he does less work for Amside for a while, and finds that he can't avoid Matt for ever.

Where was the drama located? The drama is located in many places, some being:

• School playground - which sounded like the typical primary school playground as you could hear a lot of screaming and playing from young children.
• Home enviroment - this sounded like it was set in the kitchen area as you could hear the clicking and tapping of the draws being shoved around.
• Work/Office - without them stating they were at the office I wouldn't have know they were here.
• Cafe - this sounded like the typical cafe enviroment at a busy lunch with chatter and cuttlery it give a clear picture of the place.

Was it all set in one day? Yes it was all set in one day, it showed quite a busy day for some though.

5 Places where you can listen to Radio Dramas

• BBC Radio 4 Extra
• BBC Radio 4
• Cornucopia Broadcasting
• Radio Once More
• Oxford Classic Radio

Radio Drama Ideas

• Breakup -
  - Both sides of the story.
  - Stereotyped teenage relationship.
  - Comedy
  - Affair
• School/college - - Past student narrating
  - very judgemental
  - not in the in crown but bases most of her judging on them.
• Teenage family drama - Diary form
  - Research: Tim Dowling
  - Diary form
  - To narrate and set the scene. This can be used also to get to know the characters in more detail in little time.
  - Mostly mothers point of view.

Production Timetable

Date: Wednesday 5th December
Time	Character	Location	Actor/ess	Notes
11:45	Mia	Main stage	Sophie Hoskin
12:15	Emma	Main stage	Charlotte Hollis
13:10	Violet	Main stage	Hayley McCarthy
Date: Thursday 13th December
14:50	April	Main stage	Annie Rose

 

Props List

Production Name: Copper Prep

Producer: Charlotte Hollis

Item	Script page	Description	Actor/location	Notes
Cigar	4	Large Cuban cigar, expensive looking, 7” long	Craig Jennings	Is not lit – is held in actors mouth
Door		Door opens and closes	Classroom	Squeaky as it’s a silent destination.

Location Scouting

 

 

Casting ‘Talent’

Emma

Charlotte – Knows the story and character well and is happy to improvise during the role if something else sounds better in the moment.

Mia

Sophie – Good tone for the part and has a strong confident voice which is what I imagined for the part of Mia as she’s a strong confident character.

April

Annie – April needs a very girly voice and Annie will fit this part perfectly. She has just the right personality to act out this part so will connect easily.

Violet

Hayley – Hayley fits this part well as her voice has many tones and Violet changes emotions a lot throughout the drama therefore I’d need someone who is capable of doing this.

 

Locations of where to record

·         Hallway

·         Classroom

·         Outside location

Recording Equipment

·         Go Mic by Samson.

Contingency Plans

Locations

·         Empty classroom instead of a hallway

·         Empty room instead of classroom

Recording Equipment

·         Zoom

·         Phone (last plan if despirate)

Evaluation

1.      What went well?

a.      I am proud with my casting and feel the actors fit well with the characters.

2.      What was less successful?

a.      After hearing from my target audience they commented on the bits I thought they would.

b.      My drama was very confusing and didn’t go anywhere.

c.       I feel Emma could have had some more emotion in her voice as she has a very mono-tone sounding voice and can get very boring to listen to.

3.      How have you improved your drama after your feedback?

a.      My target audience mentioned how it was very confusing and they didn’t understand what went where so I added a bit of music to highlight where the scenes changed.

4.      If you did this unit again and make another radio drama, what would you differently?

a.      If I were to do this again I would have chosen one of my other choices as mine was very hard to re-create as it was a confusing topic.